In todays revision day for media studies, we showed our teachers our nearly finished film opening product. We then decided on a few more things we could tweak, for example:
Making the screaming louder when the girl is looking in the fridge
Making the car slamming louder
Adding some more music during the park scene
Adding an extra shot to the beginning of the film opening in order to introduce the surroundings
After all three of us posting our video opening on facebook, we got a variety of different feedback. Due to all of this feedback, we changed our film opening on things we agreed with:
In this beginning of our film opening, we put all of our ideas we had from the storyboard together and through doing this we decided what things worked well and what things we needed to change. A few things we noticed in creating these were:
- The dialling on the mobile at the beginning was too quickly
- The conversation with both girls is un-needed, only one girl is needed in order to add suspense
- The girl scaring the other needs to be more suspense filled and a mysterious shot in order to make sure the audience do not know who is creeping up on the girl
- There needs to be more stalker shots at the beginning of the film
- The shot of the hand going down the tree needed to be taken out and replaced by another stalker shot
- Some of the shots are silent and therefore a soundtrack of some kind would build the tension
- The house sequence needs to be changed; a conversation is not needed
- Some of the shots need to be edited down and tweaked
After having the weekend to think over a new story plot, we then decided on a few ideas:
- Keeping the two girls in the park
- The girls could be sitting on a blanket
- Someone could be watching them
- They could still go back to their house and have a sleepover
After we discussed our new ideas with the teacher, we then decided on our idea of having two girls relaxing/meeting up in the park. The two girls then walk home and someone is watching them - perhaps they could be kidnapped?
